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Heart Sutra

Sunday, April 16, 2006

Inara's reaction to Jubel Early's visit during Objects in Space

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2790    RATING: 8.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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This plot bunny just wouldn’t stop thumpering around in my head so I finally got around to writing it and then finally got around to posting it because, hey, how can you improve characterization if you don’t get feedback, eh? I would greatly appreciate any comments, especially about my characterization of Inara because I just feel that she eluded me and next time I’d like to do better. Thanks!

Disclaimer: Obviously, it’s not mine and I make no claims to it.

For all her education Inara Serra was left without words when she woke to the sound of her shuttle door sliding open in the middle of the night and opened her eyes to find Simon standing there, hands splayed and arms held out from his sides. Before she could ask him what had happened (well-bred gentlemen of the Core did not invite themselves into the shuttles of sleeping women, especially not those as socially shy as Simon) there was a large dark-skinned man in a lurid red space suit with a shining gun trained on her. Despite the instruction in self-defense that she had received during her time at the Temple, there was little she could do while wrapped up in her coverlet.

The bounty hunter had introduced himself politely and calmly explained that he was here to search for River Tam (Inara’s eyes shot briefly to Simon who looked ashamed to be standing there) and would she kindly pull the blankets down so he could be certain that she didn’t have a weapon hidden? He smirked when she did so and said there would be no need for her to strip given her attire. He then proceeded to stare at her for a full minute. Inara did her best to read him while maintaining a subservient air he would find non-threatening. It wasn’t difficult to cultivate an air of vulnerability while lying in her bed, Simon held hostage, watching the madman deliberately stroking his pistol. His search of the shuttle was methodical, thorough and brief and for this, she was glad. It was obvious that there was something very, very off about this man. Even someone as dense as th

Comments
Sunday, 16 April 2006 06:11
Very good, i really like your style.






Real Worlding....not for everyone.
Sunday, 16 April 2006 07:50
Well now....this a might good fic here, Zisker. Generally in-character (some slight out of sync vibe coming from her attempt to figure our River's gameplan) and I really liked Inara's attempt to meditate on the Heart Sutra to encourage positive thoughts on River's behaviour and actions during "Objects in Space." Mainly cuz I was reminded of the Bene Gesserit "Fear is the mindkiller..." mantra from the Dune series;)

BEB
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 03:16
The only thing that didn't mesh was in paragraphs four, five and seven (after the disclaimer and at the start of the story). Inara has the incense intent on praying in paragraph four. Then she puts the incense down, rises and moves the curtain to the console. Then in paragraph seven she is frozen with a stick of incense half way to its holder.

Other than that minor point I really enjoyed reading more from Inara's point of view. Well written!
Wednesday, 28 June 2006 16:24
interesting take on how inara might be feeling during OiS. very fitting that she would meditate.

b
Monday, 09 April 2007 13:49
* applauds whole-heartedly *

I like how you wove together her reaction to the lines in OiS, choosing just the right moments to expound upon. Also, good work in slowly emerging her in the meditation, first easily distracted, then to the point of being so fervent that the gunshot hardly phased her. I like how it ends with Mal opening the door.

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