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Saturday, July 29, 2006

Alright, well...I've noticed I'm not so good with the dialogue (as I've said MANY times before), and I wrote a little more on my story. The second part is still in the process of being written, but I'd like a beta-reader to help me out, that way I can avoid re-editing it and re-editing it after I posted it. Any takers? Just to tease you all, here's the very first paragraph of the second installment of "Sweet Serenity":

The wind pushed lightly past his face, waving his hair around his forehead. He closed his eyes so he could feel the gentle breeze pass through. He opened them to find himself sitting on a large, circular stone that was dug into the ground. He looked fondly upon the bamboo stems as they joined his hair in their dance with the wind. He looked up to see the rays of the sun sneaking past the leaves as they too joined in the dance. The effect was the shadows on the ground moving in harmony with everything else. It was Nature’s Dance. He just had to smile.

COMMENTS

Tuesday, August 1, 2006 12:32 PM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Honestly sounds more like Wash...or Mal if he was stoned or something;)

BEB

P.S. I would be happy to beta read for ya. Just drop me the file as an attachment and list whatever tasks you need handling:D

P.P.S. E-mail's z_wing@hotmail.com

Sunday, July 30, 2006 8:38 PM

BESTATWHATHEDOES


Nope. Jayne's happy moments involve nude women, money, and guns...actually, that's not too bad, come to think of it.

Sunday, July 30, 2006 2:28 PM

STINKINGROSE


Jayne having a happy moment?


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