BLUE SUN ROOM FILK

ABBIEX

Christmas disaster
Thursday, November 30, 2006

my friend wrote this for english and just wanted to know what you thought about it please leave a coment about it


CATEGORY: FILK    TIMES READ: 1562    RATING: 7    SERIES: FIREFLY

The Christmas disaster

Samantha was sitting on her bed folding her clothes and neatly laying them into separate piles in her suitcase .Her mouth was watering at the thought of going home to her mum’s home cooked turkey. She couldn’t wait she never missed a Christmas with her family. She grabbed her notebook and started ticking through her list passport , money ….. everything was there.

“beep, beep” her taxi had arrived to take her to the airport .Samantha grabbed her coat and house keys and locked the door on her way out .She quickly opened the car boot and through her suitcase into the boot . She was so excited about going home this Christmas as she was going to meet her new baby brother . she has only ever seen him a few times and that is only by photograph . She cant wait to see his beautiful wee feet and hold his tiny soft hands . it was at this point that something snapped her out of her dream . There was a load bang and the car jerked forward . the taxi stopped quickly and the taxi driver jumped out of the car . She looked out of the back window and saw her driver arguing with a large stranger .She looked at her watch and noticed if she was to stay here for much longer she would probably miss her flight . She got out of the car “driver I am sorry to bother you at a moment like this but I have a really important plane to catch im going to visit my family this Christmas “

“ im so sorry miss but this guy has dented my bumper and it says in my contract if something like this situation was to happen we were to exchange details and wait for the police to arrive”

“but you don’t understand I haven’t seen my familt for a whole year I have a new baby brother I really cant miss my flight”

“ look miss ill be as quick as possible but right now I really cant do anything so please sit back in the car”

Samantha walked back to the car and put her head in her kness and rocked back and forth . She took out her watch and examined it closely. It was 7:30 and her flight was at eight . There was no way for her to get there and if she walked she wouldn’t have made it in time . she shed a tear . Nobody could ever imagine her unhappiness just like everyone other special occasion she didn’t want Christmas to be the same she would be spending it alone .Even though she knew she wouldn’t make it she kept glancing over at the clock hoping for some type of miracle . Every time she looked it was only one minute later but to her it seemed like an hour . Just when she had given up all hope the driver opened the door “ Miss this could take awhile the police have not arrived yet but if you really had to make this flight I have enough ime just now to call for another taxi driver to come pick you up”.

“I guess that would be amazing” she wiped her wet face with her handkerchief “But how long would it take “.

“ Not too long there is a taxi service not far from her” . He grabbed his car phone and called for another taxi to come collect her . Samantha smiled a smile so beautiful it could make anybody weak at the knees . She had never been so happy than at that moment when she knew there was still a little chance she could make it . After that moment even though time was dragging on she tried to forget about everything around her and just imagine she was already home .When the taxi arrived she jumped wuickly out of the car and grabbed her suitcase out of the boot and flung it into the other cars one . When she got in the car she had finally believed she was home with her family holding her brother hand ,cutting that hot pink turkey and opening her presents . She also remem,bered what it was like when she was younger when everything was about the presents . She would have given up any amount of presents to spend time with her family. When she finally arrived at the airport she jumped out of the car and through the money onto the front seat . “thank you” she shouted as she ran along the pathway into the airport. She knew she had made it it must have only been about eight now. She ran so the checking desk and stopped to catch her breath . She was so overwhelmed . “ To Scotland she muttered” and glimpsed a smile .But soon something turned that beautiful smile into a tear. “ im very sorry but everybody had already boarded the plane and it is about to leave”.

Samantha just looked deep into the woman in front of her’s eyes and then walked over to have a seat . She just cried .While she watched her flight home fly right past her eyes.

COMMENTS

Thursday, November 30, 2006 12:02 PM

ABBIEX


please leave a comment

Thursday, November 30, 2006 3:08 PM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Well now...this is certainly an interesting tale. Not really something that is supposed to be here, since it's not filk (a fan-made song to the music of an established tune) and its not Serenifly-related...but it's certainly a heart-breaking read.

Critically, you're friend needs to totally reformat the sentence and paragraph structure, as everything runs together. That and the character's thoughts seem rather muddled. I see gold...but one has to dig a bit to get to it.

BEB


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