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LEIASKY

On The Edge: Chapter 1
Monday, January 22, 2007

Serenity lands on a war ravaged planet, amidst objection. Written as a sequel to the movie. Pairings are cannon.


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Thanks for all the comments on the Prologue. I'm glad everyone seems to be excited to see where this goes.

Thanks to Tamsibling and Mal4Prez for the beta.

The Prologue can be found here Here

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Chapter 1

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The past:

I told them the Tams were no longer a threat. Damage Done. They might listen . . .

And they did.

The Operative was wrong.

They listened, they plotted, they schemed. And, ultimately, the Tam’s weren’t the only ones on their most wanted list any more.

Such control they had over the Central Planets, the Miranda information was squashed instantly, and the crew labeled as traitors. The people believed their government. They’d never been given a reason to think otherwise.

On the Rim worlds, where Alliance control had never taken a firm foothold, even after ‘Unification’, it took very little for them to believe what the Miranda broadwave showed in vivid, disbelievingly gory detail. The people wanted more reasons to hate the Alliance, they wanted another reason to take up arms against them. . .

And they did.

The result, this time, was an even quicker, bloodier defeat.

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“Captain, I don’t think –“

“Don’t pay you to think, Simon.”

Simon took a moment to consider this. “You don’t pay me at all, captain.”

Mal rolled his eyes. “Be that as it may, I’m still the captain on this boat and what I say goes.”

“’Bout time someone else was on the spittin’ end of that increasingly bad mood,” Jayne muttered beneath his breath as he checked the various weaponry attached to his person.

Simon wasted only a cursory glare on the mercenary before returning his attention to the increasingly infuriating Captain. “You think it’s safe to land on –“

“They need help down there, Simon. I ain’t leavin’ ‘em to die.”

“So you’re going to risk the lives of everyone on this ship to –“

“Ain’t you a doctor?” Mal whirled, eyes blazing. Before Simon could push a response out of his mouth, Mal continued. “Ain’t you obligated by that Oath of yours to render aid to them that need it?”

“Well, yes, but I –“

“Well, there’s a whole planet full of people down there that need it.”

“And Alliance battle cruisers not more than a few hours out!”

Mal leaned close to Simon, his tone firm, his position unwavering. “They’re movin’ away from the planet, not towards it.” Mal took a long, long breath, and clenched his hands at his sides. “They done their job.”

“Still –“

“Simon,” Mal stepped closer, invading the younger man’s personal space while Jayne looked on with growing amusement. “Now ain’t the time to test my patience, dong ma?”

Simon set his jaw and plunged ahead, knowing what he was about to say could land him in a heap on the deck rubbing a bruising jaw – or worse. “Your anger with me has more to do with Kaylee’s condition than with my very genuine concern about landing this small transport ship onto a war-ravaged planet.”

Zoe stepped beside Jayne and raised an eyebrow in Simon and Mal’s direction. “Those two going at it again?”

“Yup.” Jayne slid his most favorite knife into its sheath. “Mal’s gonna have to get over it.”

“Not like to any time soon.” Zoe pursed her lips and shook her head, knowing that this was precisely the conversation she would be having with Mal had she ever found herself pregnant with Wash’s baby.

“Almost feel sorry for the doc,” Jayne glanced up at Inara, who stood on the catwalk above, shaking her head disapprovingly at the argument going on below.

“Doc can take care of himself,” Zoe observed with a small smile. “But Kaylee doesn’t need the stress. Not right now. Mal’s too pigheaded to realize it.”

Jayne slipped out a small firearm and caressed it lovingly. “Can I shoot ‘im?”

Zoe’s eyes slowly shifted toward Jayne, her face an expressionless mask.

“The doc! Not Mal. I ain’t stupid.”

“That’s debatable,” Zoe murmured as she squared her shoulders and prepared to intervene. “No, Jayne. You may not shoot either of them.” They both returned their attention to the heated discussion going on not more than a few feet away. Zoe clenched her jaw, waiting for the right moment to intervene.

“It’s not your place, and it’s none of your business whether Kaylee and I –“

Zoe noticed Mal tense, and decided now would be a good time to intervene before he damaged the only doctor they were like to have down on the planet.

“Sir,” Zoe pushed herself between the two men and Simon instantly took a step back, respecting her position. “We’re set to land.”

Simon waited a moment, clearly wanting to speak but choosing to remain silent, before turning on his heel and going back toward the infirmary.

“Boy better be goin’ to get medical supplies,” Mal muttered, wrenching his gun out of its holster and inspecting it carefully.

“He’s got a point, Sir.”

Mal stared incredulously at his first mate, unable to believe she would be opposed to lending aid to fellow Browncoats.

“About Kaylee, Sir. Not your decision to land on Athens.”

“Ain’t about to discuss it further, Zoe,” Mal sighted down the barrel of his pistol, and its direction toward the infirmary was not lost on Zoe.

“We’re all a mite stressed here, sir. Simon and Kaylee just as much as the rest of us.”

“Boy’d kept his pants zipped, we wouldn’t have this problem, now would we?” Mal snapped as Inara joined them on the deck, her customary silks replaced by pants and a well worn shirt.

“Don’t let Kaylee hear you say that, Mal,” Inara said, her eyes hard. She’d been witness to more than a few of Mal and Simon’s fights over the last few months and had, amazingly, kept Kaylee pretty well sheltered from the captain’s disapproval over her condition.

“Girl doesn’t – “Mal’s eyes swept down Inara’s body and his brows knitted together. Forgetting his pervious argument over this new development, he demanded, “Where do you think you’re going?”

“To help.” That Inara didn’t elaborate further was not lost on Mal.

“You ain’t goin’ out there. It’s too dangerous.”

Zoe rolled her eyes, knowing an argument with the Companion would not end well, as it never did for the captain. And he was in a bad enough mood already over his disagreement with Simon. Wasn’t fair, really. Boy had already worn him down. Inara would sink her claws into his flesh and rend it painfully with no problem whatsoever. Not that she’d ever need Simon’s help – but she’d gotten it regardless. Zoe hesitated for a moment, considering intervention, but then changed her mind and stepped away instead to keep Jayne at a manageable distance.

Inara fixed Mal with an unwavering stare. “I managed to live through a battle with Reavers, Mal. The only one who came out of that with barely a scratch, I might add. I’m certain I will be quite safe on a planet full of injured and dying.”

“This is different, Inara,” Mal’s voice softened only a fraction, “It’s –“

“I asked for her aid,” Simon said as he returned with a case stuffed with as much medicine and bandages as he could fit and still manage to carry.

Mal whirled on Simon, eyes blazing, and Zoe tensed, hoping she wouldn’t have to step in between the two stubborn men once again.

“What?” Simon stared defiantly at Mal. “You expect me to treat everyone we come across by myself? I’ve asked for Inara’s assistance and she agreed to help.”

“I don’t want her off this boat.”

“I’m glad you’re so used to not getting what you want,” Inara snapped in response. “Because I’m going. Kaylee is staying with the ship.”

Mal opened his mouth but closed it again, fixing Simon with a raised eyebrow.

“The only thing we currently agree on, Captain, is that Kaylee should remain here.”

Mal clenched his jaw tightly. “Best be thinkin’ on other things or I might just decide to leave you down there.”

No one took the threat seriously, but no one bothered to respond either. The internal gravity shifted slightly as the ship settled on the ground and the occupants in the cargo bay balanced their weight equally to keep from being jostled too badly. They waited for River to emerge from the bridge before lowering the ramp, and as she took longer than normal, Mal had moved toward the staircase to go fetch her when she appeared in the doorway to the common room with Kaylee.

Simon set down his case and moved to the agitated engineer’s side instantly. “Promise me you’ll lie down after we leave?” He slid his hands into hers, noting the way they shook from fear, anger, Simon wasn’t quite sure. He glanced down at their joined fingers, knowing his would soon be covered in blood.

“Yeah, Simon, I will.” She knew better than to argue with him when he got all protective over something. It hadn’t been an easy few months, even without news of the impending, very unexpected arrival. Her moods had swung from one end of the spectrum to the other, and right now she was in a mood to cry and throw things all at once.

Mal interrupted the couple’s moment. “An’ lock the bay doors after we leave. Don’t let anyone in that ain’t us, dong ma?” Simon shot him an annoyed look – which went ignored.

“It ain’t like I never waited behind like this before, cap’n,” Kaylee shot back, struggling to keep from rolling her eyes.

“Well, ya ain’t been six months pregnant before neither.”

Kaylee scowled at Mal and turned her attention to Simon whom she embraced tightly, closing her eyes and resting her face in the crook of his neck. “Be careful, k?”

Simon nodded as Mal moved away and punched the controls to lower the bay door. He leaned back and kissed her gently, mouth lingering a little longer than he’d originally planned. He didn’t want to leave either. He wanted to be right here where he could easily treat Kaylee if something went wrong.

“Let’s move!” Mal called as the ramp struck the ground.

Kaylee flattened her hands atop her protruding stomach and walked to the edge of the ramp, watching as her family ran off into the dark to help the wounded of yet another Alliance/Independent war.

TBC

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COMMENTS

Monday, January 22, 2007 6:36 AM

TAMMYY2J


Loved it please continue

Monday, January 22, 2007 10:15 AM

ALLIETHORN7


Can't wait for the next 63. Loved this:
Jayne slipped out a small firearm and caressed it lovingly. “Can I shoot ‘im?”


Zoe’s eyes slowly shifted toward Jayne, her face an expressionless mask.


“The doc! Not Mal. I ain’t stupid.”


“That’s debatable,”
LOL.

-Danny

Monday, January 22, 2007 10:26 AM

JONDESU


As always, quite good. Keep it up!

jW

Monday, January 22, 2007 10:49 AM

KAYNARA


I'm absolutely loving this. The dialogue and the tension--just perfect. Especially between Mal and Simon. This truly feels like a sequel to Serenity, and as such I shudder to think what you've got planned.

I can guess what Joss would have done to poor Kaylee and Simon under these circumstances. I hope you're not that evil LOL.

Monday, January 22, 2007 10:52 AM

TAMSIBLING


Oh yes - your Simon/Mal argument is the stuff dreams are made of ... the two of them have one of the most interesting dynamics in the 'verse and seeing them go at it - over Kaylee no less - it's a pleasure.

Of course, I am quite worried about what exactly they'll find on that planet ... this obviously does not bode well.

Monday, January 22, 2007 2:03 PM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Gotta say...seeing Mal and Zoe not part of the second Unification War is rather weird. Get the feeling we missed out on THAT debate in the period of time where Kaylee got pregnant;)

But holy hell was the Simon-Mal argument brilliant! Definitely gotta say this was some skillful dialogue work and character development. Really says something when Mal can get Kaylee pissed at him;D

BEB

Monday, January 22, 2007 2:09 PM

LEIASKY


BEB, you'll learn a bit more about why Mal chose not involve himself in this second war a bit further into the story.

Kaynara, dear, you KNOW I'm evil. This story is also done, other than beta corrections, I don't intend to change the plotline now . . . :)

Monday, January 22, 2007 2:14 PM

AMDOBELL


Great ansty dialogue though it seemed wrong to have Simon initially not want to go down to the planet to help the injured people, it would have felt more in character for Simon to be arguing that he had to go down. That it was his job to save lives but having it this way round was a new angle and worked well. Loved Jayne's line too. Zoe's insight into Inara was pretty accurate too. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me

Monday, January 22, 2007 3:13 PM

PLATONIST


Wow!, just finished the prologue (missed it last week)

urgent and ominous...like the film

pinky promise not to kill anyone?

Monday, January 22, 2007 6:44 PM

BLACKBEANIE


Everything seems so tense, I was almost sweating when I read it.

'Boy’d kept his pants zipped, we wouldn’t have this problem, now would we?'
LMAO

Tuesday, January 23, 2007 6:16 AM

ITSAWASH


So. Thrilling heroics. Courage. Love. Humor. Angst. This fic has started with some of all of those, and I'm liking it mightily. If I weren't so sick with a gorram sinus cold, I would be more effusive, but lemme tell you this: the opening bars are wicked good:
“Captain, I don’t think –“

“Don’t pay you to think, Simon.”

Simon took a moment to consider this. “You don’t pay me at all, captain.”

Mal rolled his eyes. “Be that as it may, I’m still the captain on this boat and what I say goes.”

“’Bout time someone else was on the spittin’ end of that increasingly bad mood,” Jayne muttered beneath his breath as he checked the various weaponry attached to his person.
---plays just like one of the best-ever episodes, Leia. You're jing zi at this and this may be your best story ever. I like that you've got mucho pages for us ready to post already, cause I'm hooked. Keep 'em coming. I even like how you "did" Jayne in this one so far. *hugs*

Tuesday, January 23, 2007 6:38 AM

LEIGHKOHL


You're evil...I know this! So, whatever you have planned for Simon and Kaylee, I am sure I will need some tissue and will think of some terrible names to call you! I loved Mal/Simon fighting!! They have such an adversarial relationship, both of them being stubborn and all, it can only get worse!! I love it!
Loved this line-

“’Bout time someone else was on the spittin’ end of that increasingly bad mood,” Jayne muttered beneath his breath as he checked the various weaponry attached to his person.

Great Jayne!
Can't waoit for the next post!

Wednesday, January 24, 2007 2:51 PM

BIGBADJAYNE


Ah, everything but character death...so almost the kitchen sink..but knowing you, someone's gonna die...hmmmm, wonder who, angsty or heroic?

I'm waiting...please continue.

Please?

Wednesday, January 24, 2007 3:42 PM

ECAMBER


So excellent! The dialogue was well crafted. Your writing is so well done that I could hear their voices in my head (which doesn't often happen). I am really excited to see where you'll be taking this... next installment soon please!

Wednesday, January 31, 2007 10:01 AM

AERIALLA


Incredible...I can't wait to read more. I have a good feeling that this is going to be a heck of a story.

Sunday, February 18, 2007 4:25 PM

KACIDILLA


"Mal clenched his jaw tightly. “Best be thinkin’ on other things or I might just decide to leave you down there.”


No one took the threat seriously, but no one bothered to respond either."

it's funny cuz it's true!

been away a while, can't wait to catch up!

Friday, March 2, 2007 6:45 PM

YINYANG


Okay, lesee... I'll list the crew as you have portrayed them here from 1 to 6 (River doesn't have a big enough part in this chapter to judge it), with 1 being the best characterization, and 6 being one I'm least fond of. I know you already wrote it all out, but, well, maybe I'm just doing this for myself? I don't read a lot of fanfiction, but there are gems here that I have to convince myself to stay for (like the threat of a bad, Joss-esque ending).

Having said that, here's the list:

1- Jayne (Did you call in a Firefly writer for his lines?)
2- Inara (Refreshingly in character, just the way I like her - and now, with pants!)
3- Mal (I don't think he would use Simon's name, but rather Doc, like he does through the show and movie, but it doesn't bother me all that much.)
4- Zoë (I debated putting her before Mal, but something in her characterization feels slightly off for me.)
5- Simon (This one is weird for me - there isn't really any cannon material that says anything to me about the way he would act after having consumated their relationship. Having said that, most of his dialogue is spiffy-good.)
6- Kaylee (She doesn't have a big part in this chapter, either, but except for her second line - "It ain't like I never..." - her dialogue and characterization feel off. I've got the same quandry here as with Simon - there's nothing cannon that implies how being pregnant with Simon's child would affect her.)

Having said that, the story-line seems interesting, and jives with my "second war" instinct (desire). :)


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