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Work shop was yesterday and i got suggestions on how to improve my poem, Rose, So here is its redo
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Barely blossoming
Exposing its heart
And soul in one
Allowing its sweet scent spill out
Spreading on the air
Hinting to its beauty
A gentleness lying inside
Delicate skin hiding it
Drooping in the garden
Unable to hold up its head
Against gravity
Or its shame
To be surrounded by bright life
Sweet green
Vibrant blues and yellow
With it’s deep red
Mocking its darkness
The defying red
Almost tempting with its defiance
Luring all with its image, Almost
Hinting
To its fear
What it will do
Warning all despite its meek appearance
With its armor
Protecting its innocence
An arsenal of hurt waiting
To stab those who harm it
To thrust its only weapon
Daggers to slice through its enemies
Who wish to take it away
To make it live its fear
To a life of sorrow
To be a sad gift
And the beginning of a lie
To kiss the lips of a bride
Doomed to cry
The sorry for absence
From father to daughter
The last good-bye
Lain across to die for the dead
All against its wishes
When all it wants is its end
In the rain and earth
That where its only friends
COMMENTS
Wednesday, January 31, 2007 4:50 PM
BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER
Thursday, February 1, 2007 4:18 AM
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