BLUE SUN ROOM FAN FICTION - HUMOR

ANONYM

Captain Cook
Wednesday, September 22, 2010

Title says it all. Please let me know what you think ;)


CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2139    RATING: 9    SERIES: FIREFLY

Inara opened her shuttle door frowning as the smell became even stronger then inside. She hasn’t smelled a smell like this since – ever! It was so nauseating she was risking meeting the dinner she ate last night. She saw Simon coming, holding a surgical mask to his face,

“What is this smell?” he asked, disgust evident in his voice “Smells like sulphur…ugh!”

Inara’s eyes were actually watering by now and ever the gentleman, Simon handed her another mask from his pocket.

“I think it’s coming from the galley, where are the others?” she asked as she looked around for any member of the crew.

“Kaylee’s in our bunk Zoe and Jayne are in their bunks too. The smell isn’t this awful as out here. I’ll just go back to ask Kaylee if she needs anything, there must be a problem with the toxic waste.” He theorized, disgust evident in is expression.

Inara headed to the galley and what she saw was something she would remember for the rest of her life.

Mal was fumbling with pans and green gunk was all over the place, including him. He managed to turn off the oven and sighed…his expression was both disappointed and sad and just plain defeated – defeated by ex-veggies.

He threw the pan and some utensils in the sink, not caring about the noise they made. Inara felt sorry for him, everyone made fun of his cooking…Simon liked to remind him that he wasn’t any better than him and the more he tried, the bigger the disaster.

Mal noticed her presence and the sad expression he had stopped her from laughing or commenting.

“Just say it.” He muttered as he turned around and sat on a chair “The other are probably dead from laughter or from the smell.”

Inara knelt in front of him, getting what she wanted – a surprised look and him diverting his attention from his self-pity to her “Mal you were planning on cooking something special. I can tell because of all the things on the cupboard but today wasn’t your turn to cook. It was mine, why did you try to cook today?”

He just looked at her and those sad eyes where almost making her cry “Mal it’s just you and me…it’s ok.” After Miranda they where somehow closer they talked in the middle of the night without fighting and that was a big improvement.

“It’s your birthday and I guess…”

“Oh Mal.” They’ve been getting closer since Miranda, she wouldn’t call them a couple just yet but there’s definitely been a great improvement. They spent nights talking at the dinner table and rarely bickered – nobody’s perfect – and when they did, one of them always apologized (usually Mal after harsh glares and cold shoulders from Zoe and Kaylee).

Right now he was looking at her, wide blue eyes who were expecting her chocolate ones to make fun of the colossal disaster Malcolm Reynolds just made. Instead she smiled, his favourite genuine Inara smile when her eyes sparkle and looked at him as amusement shone from the face which has been haunting his dreams since he first laid eyes on her.

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In silence they cleaned he kitchen and Inara wasted all the air freshener they had, they were tired and he knew she wanted to ask him something and was holding back.

She was passing him by to put a mug in the cupboard when he stopped her by grabbing her elbow firmly but gently. She looked up at him in question.

“C’mon ‘Nara I know you wanna ask me something…” he noticed, with pleasure that calling her ‘Nara was having it’s effect.

“It’s just…” she began, obviously choosing her words, gorramn Guild “it was my turn to cook tonight. Why did you try to cook?”

“Well, cause it’s your birthday…and nobody should cook on his birthday.” he finished looking intently at his boots.

“Mal?”

He looked her and then her lips were on his .

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First fanfic ...pls be gentle. Reviews keep me happy *-*

COMMENTS

Wednesday, September 22, 2010 8:18 AM

BYTEMITE


Aw. You did pretty good, so no worries. They were pretty much in character.

Mal does have his puppy dog eyes, and Inara's a sucker for them. Definitely she gets a little mushy over it, and if Mal were to be blaming himself over Miranda or other sources of depression/brooding/loneliness/misery, Inara would probably have to hold back a few sympathy tears. Ruining dinner, and finding out he was trying to do something nice for her, I could see her thinking it's a little cute and feeling sorry for him, and maybe trying not to laugh, but that's just me.

I really liked the lead up, and I agree with you that while his mother was probably a decent cook, Mal probably never picked up on the skill. Most likely he's limited to cooking cans over a fire or stove.

Wednesday, September 22, 2010 12:45 PM

PLATONIST


A few grammar errors, but overall the sentiment is very sweet:)

I like the way Mal trusted her enough to open up about why he attempted cooking, of all things.

Agree with Bytemite, Mal's cooking skills are more likely a barbecue over a fire or outdoor stove.

Thursday, September 23, 2010 6:15 AM

BLUEEYEDBRIGADIER


Gotta say...not a bad little effort you've put forward here, Anonym. As Platonist noted, a few grammar errors, but I think you shaped a nice little scene with your efforts.

Admittedly, the tone seemed a little off...guess I was expecting more snark before the soft, or Mal to bluster a bit before getting all puppy-eyed. Still! It was a lovely scene :D

Friday, October 1, 2010 6:23 AM

AMDOBELL


I liked the idea of Mal wanting to do something special for Inara on her birthday and could see his efforts (while failing spectacularly) touching her. Might be good for you to get a beta just to tidy the stories up for posting but other than that I am looking forward to reading more of them. Well done, Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"

Saturday, October 2, 2010 4:56 AM

ANONYM


Thanks so much for your feed back! Yeah I'll look for a beta if a I write another one...I'm new around here so it might be awhile before I find one xD

PS: Yep I wrote a little bit of Mal blustering but it was so bad it ruined the whole thing so I removed that part *g*

Saturday, October 2, 2010 7:19 AM

ANGELLEMARCS


I enjoyed this. Very romantic and sweet. Mal cooking....great mental image. ;)


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