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The Shiny Affair of Mr. Pink-- mini update
Wednesday, November 9, 2005

A continuation of "The Shiny Affair of Mr. Pink." Just a little post, but I like to think it's a quality post. :)


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Zoe was watin’ for them in the cargo hold. Crazy was there too, hangin’ upside down from the catwalk. She looked like some kinda long, gangly, spooky-eyed possum.

Gave Jayne the wiggles when she looked through him like she was.

“No money?”

Mal leaned against a crate. “Didn’t have it. Claimed he didn’t know where it was.”

“Huh. So where is it?”

“Whorehouse.”

Zoe’s eyebrows went up. “Anyone we know?”

“Man calls himself Mr. Pink.”

“That’s a pretty sly name for a man ta choose himself.”

“That’s what I said!” Mal an’ Zoe both turned to Jayne. Gave him one of those even stares an’ turned back to each other like he hadn’t said nothin’.

Oh. So it was fine fer Zoe to say the man’s sly fer givin’ himself a girly name…

Jayne grunted and crossed his arms.

Ching-wah tsao duh liou mahng.

“Reckon he’d be willin’ to give it up easy?”

“Doubt it. Few are.”

“Reckon we should go check it out?”

“I conjure it’d make things easier when it comes time ta break in and take it.”

“Yes, Sir.”

“Jayne.” Mal turned to Jayne. “I’m gonna need you ta go with Zoe. I reckon this Mr. Pink ain’t gonna give us our money easy-like and I’d like to know what we’re up against.”

Gorramit, he’d been standin’ right there. Not like Mal an’ Zoe’d been talkin’ in their heads.

“Shiny.” Jayne started goin’ through his guns in his head, tryin’ ta decide which one ta bring along.

“You’re just checkin’ it out. Don’t do anythin’ stupid.”

Damn.

“An’ don’t go feelin’ up the merchandise, either.”

Damn.

“Wouldn’t dream of it.” Jayne smiled.

Mal turned back to Zoe. “Be careful.”

“Always am, Sir.”

COMMENTS

Wednesday, November 9, 2005 8:46 PM

RINNYPJ


*smirk*

Feeling up the merchandise, indeed.

Kinda be suspicious if they didn't, wouldn't it?

*Snuggles Jayne*

Thursday, November 10, 2005 1:43 AM

AMDOBELL


My only complaint is this was way too short! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me

Thursday, November 10, 2005 3:04 AM

BOOKADDICT


It is a quality story, I'd love to read more.

Thursday, November 10, 2005 3:15 AM

LILKRISTY


Dang it woman! A quicky. . .Are you teasing me?

Seriously, I'm loving this story. Your Jayne is fantastic! I love seeing inside his head. Keep up the fantastic work!

Thursday, November 10, 2005 7:00 PM

ITSAWASH


Fave part: "“You’re just checkin’ it out. Don’t do anythin’ stupid.”

Damn.

“An’ don’t go feelin’ up the merchandise, either.”

Damn."

LOGorramL! Loved the River as possum bit and that Jayne calls her "Crazy." No need for a name, just crazy. It worked so well!

Write more, write longer, draw this piece out, will ya? This is like a thimble-full of water when a girl's dying of thirst. So GIVE!

Friday, November 11, 2005 9:48 AM

BELLONA


love the idea of river giving jayne the "wiggles"

b


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