Help! Plot bunny got me... by DonCoat

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Help! Plot bunny got me...

POSTED BY: DONCOAT
UPDATED: Friday, July 21, 2006 15:44
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Thursday, July 20, 2006 1:33 PM

Hi, Folks,

I just posted my first fanfic. I'd sure appreciate your feedback.

I've done some other writing, but never a Firefly piece. In fact, I haven't even read any Firefly fan fiction (shame on me), so I guess it's pretty uppity to be asking anybody to pay attention to mine.

Still, I think you might enjoy it. Here's the link:

http://www.fireflyfans.net/sunroomitem.asp?i=11876

Thanks to anybody who takes the time to go through it, and to Haken for the server space.

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Thursday, July 20, 2006 7:15 PM

KANEMAN

Thought it was quite good. Really liked the dialog.

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Thursday, July 20, 2006 8:10 PM

RCAT

Wow, very shiny! Dialog was great but catching Kaylee's spirit and use of colloquialisms were fantastic. Seemed like a segment from 'Out of Gas' if it had been done from her point of view.

Also liked how it subtely went into her "open-ness" w/ men-folk and her families additude.

"Don't you just love this party? Everything's so fancy, and there's some kind of hot cheese over there."
-Kaylee

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Friday, July 21, 2006 11:17 AM

DONCOAT

Thanks for your comments, kaneman and Rcat. Glad you enjoyed the story!

If anyone else has any comments, I'm fishing for criticism as well as compliments. So fire away, I won't bite back...

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Friday, July 21, 2006 3:44 PM

RMMC

DonCoat...I can't find anything to criticize. it was all so shiny!

Really. You got the voices just right for Kaylee and Mal.

Nice fIrst outing!

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RMMC

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