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The Extended Episode Blurb thread.

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Thursday, December 18, 2008 10:10 AM

Many thanks to Schism for the Idea of writing individual blurbs for 'imaginary' Firefly episodes and seasons.

Here is the original thread
http://www.fireflyfans.net/mthread.asp?b=4&t=35814

However AgentRouka and I have been stirring the pot somewhat and things have kicked off in a slightly different direction and the thread has snowballed (pardon the mixed metaphor). So what follows is a series of Blurbs a little out of order, but all the same, Firefly related....

Please feel to add, join in, suggest, digest and generally throw in you two cents worth should you so be inclined. It's just a bit of a hoot.... and really there's no particular direction.

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Season 3. Episode 12/24. Title: Mary Celeste.
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On their return from the Abbey, where Book was doing a stint, Wash - piloting the sister shuttle, is concerned that Serenity is drifting. When both men board Serenity they find that none of the crew are onboard. Worse still there is no sign of a struggle. They have simply vanished.

The mystery is compounded further by the fact that neither man can think of a situation where any abduction of a crew would result in the ship being left behind, unless it were for a trap. With Wash wondering just what it is he could have done - River suddenly appears on the bridge! Wash, amazed, asks River what happend to Zoe and the crew and she informs him that she was told to hide - but that the others were taken...

While Wash tries to make sense of things Book sneaks away and takes the second shuttle. Book later radios Wash saying he will find the crew and that once they are reunited they must make a run for safety and to not wait, nor follow him [Book] as they are all in great danger. Barely able to take a breathe Wash then catches a glimpse of an Alliance cruiser coming up across his bow. He's just about to tell River to hide once again when through the static he hears Mal telling him to prepare to be boarded!?

With the entire crew now on board and reunited and the Alliance cruiser on it's way the crew of Serenity try and make sense of what has happened. Wash explains Books' request that they not follow him, but Mal without a beat ignores Wash and tells him to plot a course for directly where the shuttle was headed. Wash still concerned, is rebuked by Zoe who explains to him that it was not 'us' they wanted but the good Shepherd. Book is clearly up to something and Mal don't like that.

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Friday, December 19, 2008 6:21 AM

AGENTROUKA

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Originally posted by TheSomnambulist:

The mystery is compounded further by the fact that neither man can think of a situation where any abduction of a crew would result in the ship being left behind, unless it were for a trap. With Wash wondering just what it is he could have done - River suddenly appears on the bridge! Wash, amazed, asks River what happend to Zoe and the crew and she informs him that she was told to hide - but that the others were taken...

Wash adn River.. you know, we never DID get to see those two interact! Even in fic it's barely ever done. Mysterious, that... Have they ever shared dialogue?? I like that it's happening here. :)

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Book is clearly up to something and Mal don't like that.

NO kidding. :) I like the unapologetic sneakiness. It's very Operative-like and smooth and at the same time completely at odds with the bumbling sweetness book can display about is faith with people like Mal and River. It's a chilling contrast! I see how an incredibly amount of tension can be built around this arc, involving the whole crew... Hmm..!

Now something from season 2!!

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Friday, December 19, 2008 9:27 AM

CHRISISALL

Fanty N' Mingo, episode 14
Double Trouble

In the series first crossover with it's parent show, Firefly, Fanty and Mingo pose as Alliance Operatives to bust up a slave labour outfit that recently sprung up on Shadow (They actually want to plunder its riches, but since they've become BDH's in their own right, why not kill two birds?), however, Mal & Company are there for the same purpose. Hilarity ensues and guns blaze in this homage to the screwball comedies of the 1940's.

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Friday, December 19, 2008 10:12 AM

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AgentRouka wrote:

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Wash and River.. you know, we never DID get to see those two interact! Even in fic it's barely ever done. Mysterious, that... Have they ever shared dialogue?? I like that it's happening here. :)

Yes they don't interact much. Maybe it has something to do with Wash not wanting kids - and with River suppose to be sixteen, perhaps to him she's just a child... *Shruggs* Who knows... ?

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Now something from season 2!!

Wha ! ok er lemme think.........

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Season 2: Epsiode 1 : Title: FOOL'S GOLD
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If you remember we left the crew at the end of Season One to enjoy their shore leave.

Well we now rejoin the crew as they all make their returns to Serenity. It's fun and frolics for a while as each crew member greet one another - before River notices that Jayne isn't present - (explains the joy). Anyway after some bravado from Mal about: "If Jayne aint on this boat in the next hour we leave without him" and a few of the crew saying " Which one's Jayne again?" The crew decide to go back down to Medea (fictional leisure planet) in search of Jayne.

When they arrive at Medea, there's no sign of Jayne but there is a tall tale circulating about some wild-eyed drunk thug, who had been bragging about how he's an heir to an inheritance, and so "Filthy rich!" that he's "Buying everyone a drink!" A little later Mal is approached by a 'Gregor Finch' who claims to be one of Jayne's kidnappers and that unless Mal hand over the "Thug's" inheritance they'll kill Jayne. As you can imagine there's not much urgency at first and Mal and the crew have to think hard before they actually move into action...

So with requisite reluctance Mal conceeds to help his crew member, and while the rest of the crew return to Serenity, Mal, Zoe and Book arrange a meet-up with Gregor Finch. The situation is tense. Mal fully aware that he has no bargaining tool, or Jayne's supposed inheritance to assist, he has to use all his cunning and guile to appease Finch and his hired hands. Of course that fails and there is major gun-play! Somehow Jayne isn't shot! to everyone's amazement as Zoe admits to aiming for him, and Finch manages to escape. A few of Finch's cronnies bite the dust, but not before one of them whispers something to Mal out of earshot. Mal suddenly yells to everyone to get back to Serenity, and they scarper straight away.

Later back on Serenity Book approaches Mal about what the dying man said that spooked him so. Mal evasive as ever say's it was nothing and leaves Book to contemplate. He heads to his bunk but is stopped by a meek looking Jayne - who makes apology for being "'Napped!" in his drunken state. Shyly and with a brief explanation how: "No one, not never. Came back for me, Mal." Jayne hands Mal a piece of paper, says "Thanks," and skulks off. With more weary than interest Mal opens the parchment and reads it's contents...

A beat

.....Before Mal does his trademark: "Nhuh!"

(Ok your turn

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Friday, December 19, 2008 10:14 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

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Originally posted by chrisisall:
Fanty N' Mingo, episode 14
Double Trouble

In the series first crossover with it's parent show, Firefly, Fanty and Mingo pose as Alliance Operatives to bust up a slave labour outfit that recently sprung up on Shadow (They actually want to plunder its riches, but since they've become BDH's in their own right, why not kill two birds?), however, Mal & Company are there for the same purpose. Hilarity ensues and guns blaze in this homage to the screwball comedies of the 1940's.

Chris - Great stuff!!!! I'm liking the Fanty and Mingo show! Brilliant. Ahhh what might have been eh? Damn you Fox Damn you all to helllllll!!!!!

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 11:13 AM

AGENTROUKA

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Wash and River.. you know, we never DID get to see those two interact! Even in fic it's barely ever done. Mysterious, that... Have they ever shared dialogue?? I like that it's happening here. :)

Yes they don't interact much. Maybe it has something to do with Wash not wanting kids - and with River suppose to be sixteen, perhaps to him she's just a child... *Shruggs* Who knows... ?

But Wash does want kids. Just not on Serenity. Something I do not blame him for, at all. It's really the moment where Zoe scares me the most, the way she utterly dismisses his concerns in such a serene, blithe way in "Heart of Gold". As if his feelings on the subject don't matter. That cemented to me that their marriage would have come under extreme strain if not fallen apart temporarily during the series.

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Season 2: Epsiode 1 : Title: FOOL'S GOLD
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If you remember we left the crew at the end of Season One to enjoy their shore leave.

I remember no such thing... *g*

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When they arrive at Medea, there's no sign of Jayne but there is a tall tale circulating about some wild-eyed drunk thug, who had been bragging about how he's an heir to an inheritance, and so "Filthy rich!" that he's "Buying everyone a drink!" A little later Mal is approached by a 'Gregor Finch' who claims to be one of Jayne's kidnappers and that unless Mal hand over the "Thug's" inheritance they'll kill Jayne. As you can imagine there's not much urgency at first and Mal and the crew have to think hard before they actually move into action...

I'm a little shocked! Mal, you... argh! Unless Jayne has been more insufferable than usual. What's this inheritance he's bragging about??

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Later back on Serenity Book approaches Mal about what the dying man said that spooked him so. Mal evasive as ever say's it was nothing and leaves Book to contemplate. He heads to his bunk but is stopped by a meek looking Jayne - who makes apology for being "'Napped!" in his drunken state. Shyly and with a brief explanation how: "No one, not never. Came back for me, Mal." Jayne hands Mal a piece of paper, says "Thanks," and skulks off. With more weary than interest Mal opens the parchment and reads it's contents...

A beat

.....Before Mal does his trademark: "Nhuh!"

Curiouser and curiouser... The paper contains the key to Jayne's massive inheritance? *G* And what would a dying man whisper to Mal?? Aaaah!

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(Ok your turn)

My turn? What say you?? I don't have a huge episode list in my head! I am but a greedy vulture! Hmm.

Your turn to post something from lae season one! :D

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 11:51 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

AgentRouka Wrote:

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But Wash does want kids. Just not on Serenity. Something I do not blame him for, at all. It's really the moment where Zoe scares me the most, the way she utterly dismisses his concerns in such a serene, blithe way in "Heart of Gold". As if his feelings on the subject don't matter. That cemented to me that their marriage would have come under extreme strain if not fallen apart temporarily during the series.

Ah the 'manscuse'. There are always more reasons not to do things, than there are to do them... I always read that scene as Wash using Serenity as an excuse... Oh sure it's completely practical, but... Kids... y'know... You just kinda get on with it 'spose...

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I remember no such thing... *g*

He,he fell into my trap.... Mwahahaahahaha *rubs hands*

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I'm a little shocked! Mal, you... argh! Unless Jayne has been more insufferable than usual. What's this inheritance he's bragging about??

Hey if it weren't for Kaylee pointing out to the good ol' captain, that if Mal were to leave Jayne, he'd most likely blab about River and Simon - Mal would have left him there yet!

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Curiouser and curiouser... The paper contains the key to Jayne's massive inheritance? *G* And what would a dying man whisper to Mal?? Aaaah!

Indeed - the shock reveal in season two is that Jayne is a wealthy mercenary. At least he was until he gave it to Mal. Turns out Jayne doesn't trust his own self with that much money - given what happened on Medea. That 'learnt' him :D Turns out Jayne's Ma died at the end of season one, and contrary to his previous tales of woe - Jayne was from rich stock! Who'd have thunk it? What a complex character our Jayne is -

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My turn? What say you?? I don't have a huge episode list in my head! I am but a greedy vulture! Hmm.

Ha... Actually you're a very good catalyst for me to write! None of those ideas were in my head until you mentioned "What next?"

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 12:00 PM

THESOMNAMBULIST

By the way.....

....what does that 'g' thingy mean at the end of some of your posts?

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 1:09 PM

AGENTROUKA

THis takes place after Wash dies, which I would place mid-series (IF it must happen.)

The Yellow Brick Man

After a slow-building, painful arc of increasing emotional volatility for Zoe, we are sucked into a colorful swirl of an episode taking place in a hallucinatory dreamscape.

After Zoe is hurt and knocked out in a U-Day bar fight, Ghost Wash, narrator River, brighty-bright colors and a homage to the wizard of Oz very reminiscent of Wash's dinosaur tales leave tin soldier Zoe realizing that she had a heart all along. Wash didn't give it to her, he only helped her remember that she had one and he always will.

Interspersed with the dream-bits are normal color, crew bits dealing with the way the developing political unrest post-Miranda affects the crew as a whole with everyone extremely insecure about the future of their lifestyle and no one more so than Mal. Cowardly Lion Mal tells them they are better of separate, even though it's not what he really wants, Scarecrow River hides out in the informary with Zoe (while narrating the dream bits) and has no easy fix ready, while Dorothy Inara watches news of rioting on Sihnon and contemplates which place is no place like home.

We close on Zoe waking up with a new will to live and be happy, faced with the bad news of Mal's separation plans and everyone's uncertainty. She looks both resigned and determined. Like anything is possible now that Zoe's back in full force.

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 1:11 PM

AGENTROUKA

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By the way.....

....what does that 'g' thingy mean at the end of some of your posts?

It stands for 'grin'. I sometimes use it instead of emoticons...

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 1:24 PM

AGENTROUKA

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Ah the 'manscuse'. There are always more reasons not to do things, than there are to do them... I always read that scene as Wash using Serenity as an excuse... Oh sure it's completely practical, but... Kids... y'know... You just kinda get on with it 'spose...

I don't think it's a "manscuse", really. I'm a woman and I think it's more than valid to think that raising babies on Serenity is a bad idea. I always read it as Zoe refusing to truly compromise in their marriage. Wash has completely adapted to Zoe's life, but she's not willing to contemplate changing her life for their common goal of having children. She's hardly dealt with the war, has no life seperate of Mal's ideas - safe the choice to marry - and now she wants to add children to a dangerous environment. If Wash hadn't refused, I'd have declared them both insane, frankly. :)

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I'm a little shocked! Mal, you... argh! Unless Jayne has been more insufferable than usual. What's this inheritance he's bragging about??

Hey if it weren't for Kaylee pointing out to the good ol' captain, that if Mal were to leave Jayne, he'd most likely blab about River and Simon - Mal would have left him there yet!

Callous! Explain what made Mal so willing to "leave a man behind"!

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Turns out Jayne's Ma died at the end of season one, and contrary to his previous tales of woe - Jayne was from rich stock! Who'd have thunk it? What a complex character our Jayne is -

This is hilarious! I bet it was some kind of weird, recent accident of acquired wealth.. Jayne can barely read and his Ma's writing was also fairly... simple. That home-made hat, Mattie's damplung, his Pa's welder job... They must be the quirkiest bunch, living with that much money all of a sudden!

I don't even want to imagine how Mal feels about being given this money. Guilty, greedy, relieved, bewildered! I love this!

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My turn? What say you?? I don't have a huge episode list in my head! I am but a greedy vulture! Hmm.

Ha... Actually you're a very good catalyst for me to write! None of those ideas were in my head until you mentioned "What next?"

Aww, well, I love to benefit myself. :D

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 1:57 PM

THESOMNAMBULIST

Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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THis takes place after Wash dies, which I would place mid-series (IF it must happen.)

Oh it must, it must!

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The Yellow Brick Man

After a slow-building, painful arc of increasing emotional volatility for Zoe, we are sucked into a colorful swirl of an episode taking place in a hallucinatory dreamscape.

After Zoe is hurt and knocked out in a U-Day bar fight, Ghost Wash, narrator River, brighty-bright colors and a homage to the wizard of Oz very reminiscent of Wash's dinosaur tales leave tin soldier Zoe realizing that she had a heart all along. Wash didn't give it to her, he only helped her remember that she had one and he always will.

Interspersed with the dream-bits are normal color, crew bits dealing with the way the developing political unrest post-Miranda affects the crew as a whole with everyone extremely insecure about the future of their lifestyle and no one more so than Mal. Cowardly Lion Mal tells them they are better of separate, even though it's not what he really wants, Scarecrow River hides out in the informary with Zoe (while narrating the dream bits) and has no easy fix ready, while Dorothy Inara watches news of rioting on Sihnon and contemplates which place is no place like home.

We close on Zoe waking up with a new will to live and be happy, faced with the bad news of Mal's separation plans and everyone's uncertainty. She looks both resigned and determined. Like anything is possible now that Zoe's back in full force.

Ohhh - how delicious is this idea! Dreamy episodes are intoxicating. I remember feeling the same way watching 'Restless' from Buffy season 4. You are just swept away with the lush coloured imagery. What an interesting idea to apply to Firefly. I can just imagine a network trying to grasps this one :D Whatever made you think of this... Wow.

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Cowardly Lion Mal tells them they are better of separate, even though it's not what he really wants

That's Mal right there in a nut shell! Profound observation. But... They aren't really going to seperate - are - they ? .... *sniff*

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 2:14 PM

THESOMNAMBULIST

Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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I don't think it's a "manscuse", really. I'm a woman and I think it's more than valid to think that raising babies on Serenity is a bad idea. I always read it as Zoe refusing to truly compromise in their marriage. Wash has completely adapted to Zoe's life, but she's not willing to contemplate changing her life for their common goal of having children. She's hardly dealt with the war, has no life seperate of Mal's ideas - safe the choice to marry - and now she wants to add children to a dangerous environment. If Wash hadn't refused, I'd have declared them both insane, frankly. :)

Hmm. Well if you're going to be all common sense, and right about it.... I guess you have a valid point. Zoe hasn't really moved beyond the war and I suppose from a husband point of view Zoe never showed Wash that she had even tried being less of a 'warrior'. Ok I'm sold..... Do I get points for making up the word 'manscuse'

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Callous! Explain what made Mal so willing to "leave a man behind"!

- I am so torn between revealing things now or in a later episode where it may apply more readily.

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This is hilarious! I bet it was some kind of weird, recent accident of acquired wealth.. Jayne can barely read and his Ma's writing was also fairly... simple. That home-made hat, Mattie's damplung, his Pa's welder job... They must be the quirkiest bunch, living with that much money all of a sudden!

Based on an eccentric old aunt I had as a kid. I remember her being the poor aunty, who sat by an electric fire with one bar on. (this is in the middle of winter by the way) and with a blanket over her legs - bemoaning her lot and stressing over how she would be able to pay for a plumber when the bathroom pipes burst. After her death we learnt that she had £300000 in the bank! I remember my Grandad being completely gobsmacked. Took him a while to come to terms with that... especially as he had to fix her burst pipes.

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I don't even want to imagine how Mal feels about being given this money. Guilty, greedy, relieved, bewildered! I love this!

He,he - I reckon he'd share it with the crew, patch up Serenity and hold onto a fair amount on Jayne's behalf. Nice guy our Cap'n

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Aww, well, I love to benefit myself. :D

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Saturday, December 20, 2008 2:34 PM

CHRISISALL

HOLY CRAP!!! FOX CANCELED FANTY N' MINGO!!!!

The

Chrisisall

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Sunday, December 21, 2008 9:57 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

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Originally posted by chrisisall:
HOLY CRAP!!! FOX CANCELED FANTY N' MINGO!!!!

The Chrisisall

He,he - you funny! But yes they did!

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Sunday, December 21, 2008 10:50 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

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Season 1 : Episode 18/24: Title: Shadow Puppets.
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The familiar sight of the crew sat around the dinner table in fine friendly and jovial form. For once they are all sat listening to River tell a childhood tale about Simon getting lost and crying. Much to Simon's embarrassement. The room rips with laughter when she is done. A beat. Then a sound somewhat like a "Klunk!" resonates across Serenity's hull. It's curious in it's manner as it actually seems to 'crawl' across the outer surface.

Mal suits up to examine the hull from the outside. We along with the rest of the crew listen in on his radio mic as he describes what he's seeing. On the underside of Serenity he notices what he thinks is a coffin type box... He's not sure... He goes to investigates but the radio emits static which the others are unable to hear through and when it clears.... Not a word from Mal? However further rumbles across the hull are heard. On investigation out of the bridge window they notice debris around the ship. Looks like they are passing through remnants from an old destroyed boat...

Zoe and Jayne suit up to look for Mal. A few tense moments later they return - with no Mal but they have found the box he was refering to. Zoe orders the doc to quarantine the coffin - which on cleaning of the glass plate reveals a body inside, and she orders Wash go to the bridge and look for Mal. She is concerned Mal has been knocked unconscious and is drifiting away from Serenity.

As the critical point for Mal's air supply approaches River steps onto the bridge saying she can find Mal - but she needs absolute silence as there are others screaming out there... Zoe obliges. With time running out the crew surround River as she carefully navigates Serenity through the debris. It's looking hopeless until she breaks her silence and tells Jayne to open the hatch doors. She has found Mal. Inara is the first down to the cargo bay to meet a breathless Mal. Relief! The doc examines him for CO2 inhilation. He's fine. Radio was shorted out when he got struck by debris...

Later as River sleeps in her bunk we hear voices from her dream...? Then BANG! River wakes with a start... We crash cut to the coffin and a slow track in on the body inside!

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Monday, December 22, 2008 12:01 PM

AGENTROUKA

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Season 1 : Episode 18/24: Title: Shadow Puppets.
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I love the image of River locating Mal through her gift. That's a very unique and clever way to use it in the plot of an episode! :D The episode echoes a little of both Bushwhacked and Out of Gas, but has enough meat of its own, very nice!

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Later as River sleeps in her bunk we hear voices from her dream...? Then BANG! River wakes with a start... We crash cut to the coffin and a slow track in on the body inside!

Eeeeeee, whoa, creepy ending!! :D What's in it, what's in it?

Also, please share an Inara-centric episode, or something pertaining to her, plot-wise! :D

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Monday, December 22, 2008 12:06 PM

AGENTROUKA

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Originally posted by AgentRouka:
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Cowardly Lion Mal tells them they are better of separate, even though it's not what he really wants

That's Mal right there in a nut shell! Profound observation. But... They aren't really going to seperate - are - they ? .... *sniff*

I think for the sake of advancing the series plot it wouldn't hurt to separate the crew for a time. Not forever, but for the stretch of maybe a season or half. It would vastly widen the scope, giving views into many different part of the 'verse and would allow a more intense exploration of different character relationships. I am bad at plot, though, so I have no concrete ideas.

Glad you liked my episode idea, though!

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Monday, December 22, 2008 1:08 PM

THESOMNAMBULIST

Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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I think for the sake of advancing the series plot it wouldn't hurt to separate the crew for a time. Not forever,

Pheeeeeuw! Mind you a whole half a season... That's brave - but nothng ventured nothing gained so ok....

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Glad you liked my episode idea, though!

Indeed I did. You know you should do more don't you

Ha,ha... Actually I'm partial to the dream concept as I'm trying to conjure an idea for a show based on dreams. Your angle on Wizard of Oz I just thought sublime.

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Monday, December 22, 2008 1:16 PM

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Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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I love the image of River locating Mal through her gift. That's a very unique and clever way to use it in the plot of an episode! :D The episode echoes a little of both Bushwhacked and Out of Gas, but has enough meat of its own, very nice!

Yes I did draw on those two I must admit - both hold this eerie mystery that I love.

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Eeeeeee, whoa, creepy ending!! :D What's in it, what's in it?

...it's more a case of who is in it and what he/she means to River.... ?

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Also, please share an Inara-centric episode, or something pertaining to her, plot-wise! :D

Yikes! Only this afternoon I was thinking about an Inara based one... She's a tough one though - I'm going to need some time. I just typed for half an hour then threw it out. I'm going to have to come back to it.

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Saturday, December 27, 2008 1:05 PM

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Season 1: Episode 22 of 24 Title : FOUNTAIN
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With the majority of the crew on leave Mal, Kaylee, Simon and River are left to keep themselves occupied. Kaylee and Simon take the time to become ‘familiar’ and Mal just avoids them. River being curious corners the captain in an awkward moment that has her kiss him. Mal speechless and about to respond is side-tracked when a wave from a friend of Inara’s from the guild say’s Inara needs Simons help.

Turns out Inara isn’t as healthy as she appears and although it’s not life threatening she needs a specific medicine to pass the guild strict medical requirements. Mal concerned but expressing it through bravado reiterates that he’s only going to help if he knows what the drug is for. Sensing Juniper’s (Inara’s friend) awkwardness the Doc thinking on his feet pacifies Mal’s curiosity and they fly off to Persephone - where Mal believes he may locate the medicine.

Moments later Mal and Simon are with Badger negotiating a price for the drug. It’ll cost Mal a hefty percentage on his next job with Badger, but it’s worth it. On their leaving they pick up Wash and Zoe who while peeved at their leave being cut short, understand when Mal mentions that Inara is in trouble.

When Simon and Mal reach Juniper at the guild medical facility - Inara is not looking too good. Mal only catches a glimpse of her before Juniper takes the Doc away to administers the drug via a syringe. There is a silence between Simon and Inara on meeting, before Inara asks him to keep the true purpose of the drug a secret. He agrees, but informs Inara that the captain knows more than he lets on and that the supplier of the medicine was Badger. Inara informs Simon that guild law requires it’s subjects to have a certain ‘youthful’ look that could only be sustained through drug use. Simon flashes her a concerned glance.

Back on Serenity the crew are happy to see Inara. She assures them all that she is fine, thanks to Simon and Mal. Kaylee grabs Simon calling him a hero…More prudent to Mal however, is whether or not he’ll have to go off on these jaunts in search of more of this medicine! Inara is just about to answer him, when River latches onto Mal and gives him a warm hug… The crew look on astonished!
Mal just walks away…

(Had to rush this one - sorry AgentRouka)

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Friday, January 2, 2009 10:55 AM

AGENTROUKA

Hi, I'm back from my little holiday break-from-the-internets. :)

I'm intrigued by the weird show of affection by River! Hero worship gone too far? *g*

The Inara plotline has me a little sceptical. So you are one of the "Inara is actually 76 years old" and "the Guild is oppressive of its members" schools of thought? Awww. Oh well, still sounds like quite a ride! Plus, Badger!

Also intrigued by Simon and Kaylee getting cosy this early in the series!

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Sunday, January 4, 2009 6:42 AM

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Hi, I'm back from my little holiday break-from-the-internets. :)

Hey. Hope you had a good break.

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I'm intrigued by the weird show of affection by River! Hero worship gone too far? *g*

Ahh no not exactly. It was more the idea of her immitating Simon and Kaylee. A kind of curiosity for the event of kissing someone. That didn't translate though. My poor writing. Sorry.

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The Inara plotline has me a little sceptical. So you are one of the "Inara is actually 76 years old" and "the Guild is oppressive of its members" schools of thought? Awww. Oh well, still sounds like quite a ride! Plus, Badger!

No actually I was going to lead to (later - maybe season 3

) that Inara has a terminal disease that will eventually kill her (barring any other mishaps) and that when she isn't taking the drug the effects are more evident. But I wanted to play the 'mislead' a little more because I think on the surface the anti ageing thing is the more obvious conclusion (from the audience point of view)
However I will conceed that when it comes to thinking about the characters of Serenity/Firefly Inara is last on the list. Inara is a difficult character. She's not fleshed out enough in the show or the film, and it makes it very difficult to really establish her actions and/or intent. For me anyway.

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Also intrigued by Simon and Kaylee getting cosy this early in the series!

Yeah? Cool.
I like the idea that at first they are secretive about it, but that little clues of their relationship are given by River through Rivers' odd random acts of affection (mostly towards Mal because it's funnier), that though seemingly out of place, are actually indicative of things she is witnessing between Simon and Kaylee.

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Sunday, January 4, 2009 8:36 AM

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Hi, I'm back from my little holiday break-from-the-internets. :)

Hey. Hope you had a good break.
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I did! What about you? :)

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I'm intrigued by the weird show of affection by River! Hero worship gone too far? *g*

Ahh no not exactly. It was more the idea of her immitating Simon and Kaylee. A kind of curiosity for the event of kissing someone. That didn't translate though. My poor writing. Sorry.

Oh no, not really. :) The two things are generally related, anyway. What teen crush that leads to kissing is actually lurve, after all, but a venue to for sexual experimentation? :)

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The Inara plotline has me a little sceptical. So you are one of the "Inara is actually 76 years old" and "the Guild is oppressive of its members" schools of thought? Awww. Oh well, still sounds like quite a ride! Plus, Badger!

No actually I was going to lead to (later - maybe season 3 ) that Inara has a terminal disease that will eventually kill her (barring any other mishaps)

Heart-breaking evil! :D

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and that when she isn't taking the drug the effects are more evident. But I wanted to play the 'mislead' a little more because I think on the surface the anti ageing thing is the more obvious conclusion (from the audience point of view)

It would, perhaps, be a bit of overkill, since it immediately paints the Guild in a negative light, and casts a really doubtful shadow about Inara. I mean, if not taking her anti-aging meds makes her look fifty, this is more than a little suspicious. Plus, it messes with the perception of Inara's character to put her age into question. Whether she is actually 27 or 40 would matter, behavior-wise. So I'd tweak that plotline (or misdirection) a little, if I was you, to make it less monumental, more of a passing thing like in "Ariel".

In general, I love the idea!! :D

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However I will conceed that when it comes to thinking about the characters of Serenity/Firefly Inara is last on the list.

Don't blame you for that. Not everyone must love her like I do!

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Also intrigued by Simon and Kaylee getting cosy this early in the series!

Yeah? Cool.
I like the idea that at first they are secretive about it, but that little clues of their relationship are given by River through Rivers' odd random acts of affection (mostly towards Mal because it's funnier), that though seemingly out of place, are actually indicative of things she is witnessing between Simon and Kaylee.

Oooooh! Now THAT is a great misdirection! Because it would freak Mal out to the extreme and really fit with the "crazy" and there would be this incredibly sweet pay-off when it's revealed what she is really doing! Awww!

Something from later in your series, pretty please!!!

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 4:59 AM

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grr arrg.

I failed to notice that this thread topic had been duplicated when I sent my newest episode blurb to the previous thread. Here it is recopied:

A friend of mine first noted that the actress Sarah Chalke from the TV show Scrubs looks very much like Jewel Staite. Almost like a sister...

Then I had an idea. How about a fun little episode about Kaylee where the crew is required to set down on the very planet/moon where Kaylee first came aboard with Bester. The reason they're here is that Kaylee's sister (played by Sarah Chalke) has sent her a wave on the Cortex for (insert reason). Once aboard, (perhaps she needs a free ride somewhere and is freerolling on sis? This would annoy profit motivated Mal) we find out that she has a history of trying to steal Kaylee's boyfriends and immediately starts hitting on Simon who has NO CLUE how to handle it. In the end, hilarity ensues and Kaylee's sis is eventually dumped off at her destination. By episodes end the process of meeting her actually strengthens Simon and Kaylee's relationship. In the final scene we'd be gifted with a 1st kiss. This of course flys in the face of their relationship in the movie, but I'm thinking "what-if" had the show continued in a proper fashon.

I like this episode because it serves as a comedy in my mind, something needed after an episodic Drama like my idea above for "We Were Soldiers"

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 9:12 AM

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bluesuncompanyman - Nice episode there fella! Always good to have the humour. I can visualise this one being one you want to re-watch :D I wonder what Jayne would make of Kaylee's sister?

I know what you mean about ignoring the film for these creative conjectures. I'm of a similar notion. Book and Wash are just too rich to ignore for further episodes..
Good to have you contribute.. D'you have any more?

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 9:28 AM

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I did! What about you? :)

It was chaotic and riotous - but fun because the mahem was caused by my nieces and nephews who are just hilarious fun.

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Oh no, not really. :) The two things are generally related, anyway. What teen crush that leads to kissing is actually lurve, after all, but a venue to for sexual experimentation? :)

Holy Moly you're right - Dang did I waste my teenage years!

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Heart-breaking evil! :D

He,he I know. Aint I a stinker eh?

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It would, perhaps, be a bit of overkill, since it immediately paints the Guild in a negative light, and casts a really doubtful shadow about Inara. I mean, if not taking her anti-aging meds makes her look fifty, this is more than a little suspicious. Plus, it messes with the perception of Inara's character to put her age into question. Whether she is actually 27 or 40 would matter, behavior-wise. So I'd tweak that plotline (or misdirection) a little, if I was you, to make it less monumental, more of a passing thing like in "Ariel".

I'm not sure I follow you here... As I read it what do think to the guild being just 'Her' excuse for her actions, so that INARA paints them in a less than positive light. Would that work?

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Don't blame you for that. Not everyone must love her like I do!

Aw thanks - No I like Inara and her put downs of Jayne in particular, but I feel her development was just getting started when things ended. Her breakdown in Hearts of Gold really has me welling up (I really don't do crying) and i still struggle to rewatch that scene as a result. I just wish the writers had her mucking in with the crew a little more or vice versa.

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Oooooh! Now THAT is a great misdirection! Because it would freak Mal out to the extreme and really fit with the "crazy" and there would be this incredibly sweet pay-off when it's revealed what she is really doing! Awww!

Thanks. Best of all would be the hurt in Mal's face when he realises River has no actual true feelings for him. Kinda like when someones crush on you ends.

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Something from later in your series, pretty please!!!

Will do.

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 10:36 AM

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Oh no, not really. :) The two things are generally related, anyway. What teen crush that leads to kissing is actually lurve, after all, but a venue to for sexual experimentation? :)

Holy Moly you're right - Dang did I waste my teenage years!

Why, did you waste them on True Love? *g*

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Heart-breaking evil! :D

He,he I know. Aint I a stinker eh?

Not if it's interestingly done, you're not. ;)

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I'm not sure I follow you here... As I read it what do think to the guild being just 'Her' excuse for her actions, so that INARA paints them in a less than positive light. Would that work?

Of course, but neither would the reader know that and thus assume it for a fact that the Guild is kind of oppressive, but it also seems really OOC that Inara would do anything to paint them in a bad way, considering how well she usually speaks of them and how much she struggles to get Mal to respect her job and choices. It'd be like wearing a t-shirt that says "Mal is right about the Guild". Doesn't want to make sense to me.

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Oooooh! Now THAT is a great misdirection! Because it would freak Mal out to the extreme and really fit with the "crazy" and there would be this incredibly sweet pay-off when it's revealed what she is really doing! Awww!

Thanks. Best of all would be the hurt in Mal's face when he realises River has no actual true feelings for him. Kinda like when someones crush on you ends.

What? He'd be relieved like a cat climbing out of a pool! I doubt he'd love having a teenaged River having a crush on him and using him as her experimental sex toy! He has all these fatherly feelings for her!

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Something from later in your series, pretty please!!!

Will do.

YAY! Thank you!

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 12:07 PM

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While repairs are made to Serenity at the planet of Calisto (paid for with Jaynes inheritance - Ref: Se02 Ep01) a terminally injured man manages to smuggle on board a tube of biohazardous material. The crew of Serenity returning from their shore leave are unaware and take off once again bound for the black in their nice 'Shiny' smooth running ship!. It's a few hours later and the crew begin to notice that they aren't feeling too well. Kaylee is first to fall ill and the Doc examines her but is unable to ascertain her problem before he collapses. With the remainder of the crew concerned they consider what needs to be done and while trying to think of a solution the majority of the crew collapse also.

All that is except River and Mal. Mal though is poorly and barely able to stand. But he does stay conscious long enough to tell River to hail Badger for help.

River manages to hail Badger! and asks for his help in curing the crew. Badger agrees to help someone form the ol' homestead of course, and even informs River that a wave has been buzzing about some stolen biohazardous material on Calisto. So her approach to Persephone has to be quiet. He'll have his men, in full quarantine, come and meet Serenity and take the crew to a med facility on Persephone. He'll square up with Mal later (insert big Badger grin)

When the crew wakes up they find themselves being overseen by Badger - who keen to exploit his good turn demands upon Mal some kind of payment. Mal forfeits the remainder of the inheritance and allows Badger the prize of returning the biohazard material he located in Serenity's hold back to those that want it for the handsome reward being offered.

With deals squared up, the crew fly away once again - bemoaning thier bad luck at having lost thier money, but grateful Badger isn't asking questions as to who River actually is! Mal though wants know how come River was immune and wonders if it isn't time they find out just what it is was done to her!

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Tuesday, January 6, 2009 12:16 PM

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Why, did you waste them on True Love? *g*

......There was little that was 'True' about it - and not nearly enough sex!

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Not if it's interestingly done, you're not. ;)

Cheers

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It'd be like wearing a t-shirt that says "Mal is right about the Guild". Doesn't want to make sense to me.

Ha - yes indeed. You're absolutely right. Can't have that... Say you've really got into the head of Inara haven't you? Hmmmm *Rubs chin* Me-thinks you should write more Inara episodes AgentRouka.

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What? He'd be relieved like a cat climbing out of a pool! I doubt he'd love having a teenaged River having a crush on him and using him as her experimental sex toy! He has all these fatherly feelings for her!

Complex man our Mal

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Thursday, January 8, 2009 1:24 PM

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While repairs are made to Serenity at the planet of Calisto (paid for with Jaynes inheritance - Ref: Se02 Ep01)

I love the continuity!

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I love the continuity!

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With deals squared up, the crew fly away once again - bemoaning thier bad luck at having lost thier money, but grateful Badger isn't asking questions as to who River actually is! Mal though wants know how come River was immune and wonders if it isn't time they find out just what it is was done to her!

Ooooooh! Super!Immune River? And how evil is it that the crew seems to have all their fortunes taken from them by mobsters a few days after they get it??

Now I have two questions:
1)Why did the sick man smuggle the biohazardous material onto Serenity? To cause an epidemic, like a terrorist attack? Was he going to do the same on Calisto? Or did he have an entirely different reason?
2) Badger has the means to receive the crew in full quarantine mode? That is Very Interesting, since he struck me as a fairly small crime lord, sitting where he was. Does he have that stuff just lying around? Is he into medical smuggling or organ smuggling (Tracey??) or... biohazard smuggling??

No wait, make that three questions: The two episodes in between, what are they about? :D

As always, thank you for sharing!!

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Thursday, January 8, 2009 1:29 PM

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Why, did you waste them on True Love? *g*

......There was little that was 'True' about it - and not nearly enough sex!

Heh. Doesn't have to be a bad thing. I find men in their twenties vastly more appealing than in their teens.

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Hmmmm *Rubs chin* Me-thinks you should write more Inara episodes AgentRouka.

If I had any gift for plot at all, I might, but the sad thing is that I cannot actually construct anything beyond a scene or two. I love picking things apart, which is what fuelled my fic back when I wrote, but I am a failure at actually creating a story. A painful truth. I leave it up to people with real imagination!

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Friday, January 9, 2009 10:24 AM

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I love the continuity!

It was nice to be able to include it.

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Ooooooh! Super!Immune River? And how evil is it that the crew seems to have all their fortunes taken from them by mobsters a few days after they get it??

Yes. Such is the nature of crime.

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Now I have two questions:

Shoot.

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1)Why did the sick man smuggle the biohazardous material onto Serenity? To cause an epidemic, like a terrorist attack? Was he going to do the same on Calisto? Or did he have an entirely different reason?

Basically, the idea is that there will always be a black market for such things. This particular individual, perhaps a disgruntled worker, or a student looking for a fast buck, decides this is easy money. However he succumbs to either the stolen material or is gunned down by the requisite authorities. I didn't really finish his part of the tale, but I had it in mind that Badger would have furnished the audience - via dialogue - with some explanatory exposition about how biochemical fascilities are targets for just such a thing.

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2) Badger has the means to receive the crew in full quarantine mode? That is Very Interesting, since he struck me as a fairly small crime lord, sitting where he was. Does he have that stuff just lying around? Is he into medical smuggling or organ smuggling (Tracey??) or... biohazard smuggling??

Ok my take on Badger is that he knows a great many people. People who, for whatever reason, owe him a favour. Perhaps he leant them money, or he managed to supply illegal medicine, or he provided an alibi etc and so forth. So when times such as these come up, he basically leans on an individual to pay up. It's a contrivance I grant you

but in this case Badger knew the guy who runs the quarantine unit on Persephone and it just happens that this guy lets a few things slip by quarantine for a price. Badger uses such information as blackmail.

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No wait, make that three questions: The two episodes in between, what are they about? :D

Ha,ha! Well There will be good times for the crew. They have some money of course from Jayne's inheritance, and moral is up. Kaylee and Simon are snuggly - and consider sharing the one room!!! Or is that too soon? (ask the captain :D) Book feels more in tune with his mission, now that the crew, full of joy, take time to listen to him a little more. Zoe and Wash take a few trips to City resorts and maybe visit family(?) Jayne spends his time cleaning his guns and going 'sexing' as he puts it, but stays away from gambling and drinking for a change. River begins writing a strange coded journal and wonders about the ship studying her lines, and Inara and Mal are talking nicely to each other and pondering a life beyond crime.

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As always, thank you for sharing!!

Sure no probs. It's peasure

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Friday, January 9, 2009 11:01 AM

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Heh. Doesn't have to be a bad thing. I find men in their twenties vastly more appealing than in their teens.

Yeah but when I look back and realise I missed soooo many opportunities.... Curse my sentimental nature (anyway I reflect on those times with humour) If ever I have kids my advise will be: "Don't listen to me I didn't have a clue at your age."

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If I had any gift for plot at all, I might, but the sad thing is that I cannot actually construct anything beyond a scene or two. I love picking things apart, which is what fuelled my fic back when I wrote, but I am a failure at actually creating a story. A painful truth. I leave it up to people with real imagination!

Ok a few things:
1) Can I read any of your past fic?

2) I would like to suggest something as regards to writing...
•Start at the end. (I find that when I have the end idea, making the story reach that point is a good deal easier)
•Keep it really simple at the start (Like drawing, you always do a skecth first) Later you can add in a scene, or a charcater and work that into what you already have.
•A Title as early as possible often helps.
•Post it notes! (These things have saved my bacon on numerous occasions) Once I have the basic story I break it down into acts, and scenes - with a little footnote saying: "Moment of Drama or Comedy or Mystery etc. THen post it up on a wall. That way you can see if maybe you have too many dramatic scenes next to one another or perhaps one act is missing comedy....

3) Everybody has imagintion. I like to think it matures with age as we do. It's not better or worse necessarily but more mature. I can tell from your Wizard of Oz episode that you have plenty of imagination! Also your writing is very eloquent, (as in your posts are always well written) I think reading what you imagine would be easy and effortless.

4) Poetry. Reading poetry is wonderful for understanding the economy of words. It's a must.

5) Don't fear criticism. (I'm sure you don't by the way - It's just a rule employ for work)

These are just my thoughts. I realise writing is a very personal thing so I may be way off. But thought I'd relay it just in case.

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Friday, January 9, 2009 11:29 AM

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If ever I have kids my advise will be: "Don't listen to me I didn't have a clue at your age."

If they're honest, this is what most parents should tell their kids. What teenagers have an actual clue? Very few of them. *g*

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Ok a few things:
1) Can I read any of your past fic?

You're welcome to. It's all under my profile, so just click on my username and look. I think they are decent quality for their type, but you'll find no plot there whatsoever. *g*

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4) Poetry. Reading poetry is wonderful for understanding the economy of words. It's a must.

That is very true! I love when people are capable of condensing a great deal of meaning into very few words, and use language very consciously!

You're very sweet to give me advice.

I'm not sure I'll have find the inspiration or ambition - and most of all patience - to come up with a plot for a longer story, though. I rely on short bursts of inspiration and then finish a story in one sitting. Attempts at anything else have always ended with me losing interest. I do admire people who have the discipline and passion to write on one plotty piece for a longer time, but I'm quite content sticking to shorter pieces.

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Thursday, January 15, 2009 8:56 AM

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You're welcome to. It's all under my profile, so just click on my username and look. I think they are decent quality for their type, but you'll find no plot there whatsoever. *g*

Hey Agentrouka - I have been checking them out. They're superb. I love the one where they all are turned into infants. Very funny, and what's this lark about not having plot points? You have them. That tie up with Mal seeing Inara then Jayne without thier clothes is a brilliant plot point. Just unconventional but it's still a plot point. Nice work.

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That is very true! I love when people are capable of condensing a great deal of meaning into very few words, and use language very consciously!

The mark of a great writer. Hemingway was always good at this.

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You're very sweet to give me advice. I'm not sure I'll have find the inspiration or ambition - and most of all patience - to come up with a plot for a longer story, though. I rely on short bursts of inspiration and then finish a story in one sitting. Attempts at anything else have always ended with me losing interest. I do admire people who have the discipline and passion to write on one plotty piece for a longer time, but I'm quite content sticking to shorter pieces.

You know much of Dickens was short bursts of inspiration... Ok he wrote chapters of inspiration, but he did serialise his work - which kind of lends itself to the shorter format

Anyway I have been enjoying your fic - so y'know if you ever do manage to sit patiently in front of a typewrite and you write something - let me know. I'm a keen reader.

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Thursday, January 15, 2009 9:55 AM

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Ok I had this idea... Haven't really given it too much thought though so I'll lay down some events.

Lets see....
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During his shift on the bridge Wash unscrambles a signal, that when decoded mentions the destroying of a high class Alliance Cruiser. He presents the news to the crew who are divided by it's significance. Wash is not expecting much support other than from Book, which he gets, but when Mal is on his side he thinks he must be dreaming!?

Simon is clearly not keen, as is neither River or Kaylee - obviously siding with Simon- and Jayne doesn't see the profit it in. Inara would rather they not put Simon and River in danger and so thinks it a bad idea, as does Zoe - however as it is her husband and Mal thinking to do the noble thing she sides with them and the crew 'splintered' go in search of the Cruiser under supposed threat.

When they are within range of the cruiser, Inara, Kaylee, River, Simon and Book (Mal asks Book to tag along to look after them all. By now Mal has fully accepted that Book is no 'ordinary' Shephard) - take flight in Inara's shuttle and will await a later rendezvous with Serenity. (They hope)!

This leaves the rest to make contact with the Alliance cruiser. Which they do but are met by a less than accommodating Alliance officer and Serenity is boarded then impounded. Jayne is all full of: "I told you so's" at this point. The crew are taken off Serenity and imprisoned.

Under questioning, Mal assures the Officer that his intentions are noble and that if he just listen to the decoded signal he will hear for himself that they are now ALL in danger! However Zoe and Mal's past isn't allowing the Officer to move beyond his prejudice and they make no headway - (plus he is aware that Firefly class ships are on alert to be examined) . There is a moment between Zoe and Mal where they acknowledge the fact that this cruiser is actually occupied by family's moving off-world to one of the Terraformed planets to begin a new life. This makes their plight all the more desperate and they are just about to divise a plan to break out when a huge explosion rips across the cruiser! There is mass panic and confussions as huge sections of the cruiser crumbles to pieces.

..........TO BE CONTINUED

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Saturday, January 17, 2009 9:10 AM

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During his shift on the bridge Wash unscrambles a signal, that when decoded mentions the destroying of a high class Alliance Cruiser. He presents the news to the crew who are divided by it's significance. Wash is not expecting much support other than from Book, which he gets, but when Mal is on his side he thinks he must be dreaming!?

Ooh, curious! But wouldn't Inara or Kaylee also be concerned about the people on the Cruiser?? Also, wow! Now that's a big-sized plot idea!

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Under questioning, Mal assures the Officer that his intentions are noble and that if he just listen to the decoded signal he will hear for himself that they are now ALL in danger!

And they are! Crap! (I'm loving this, it would make an excellent episode!)

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and they are just about to divise a plan to break out when a huge explosion rips across the cruiser! There is mass panic and confussions as huge sections of the cruiser crumbles to pieces.

..........TO BE CONTINUED

Aaaah! I love this...! Next episode! I need to know what happens next!!

*popcorn*

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Friday, January 23, 2009 8:00 AM

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...Mal, Zoe, Wash and Jayne pick themselves from out the debris that collapsed around them. Once Mal is sure they're all well enough to walk, he digs about the rubble... He uncovers a bloodied alliance officer and with a resigned drop of his head, indicates the poor soul is dead. Zoe gives Mal a- 'This aint good' glance.

Meantime segments of the cruiser continue to explode sending splinters of ship hurtling through space. One such huge piece flies furiously close and just past the shuttle of Inara! Book, Kaylee, Simon and River are all by her side, scanning the area for signs of Serenity. Book continues in vain to radio to Serenity. Nothing. They're all visibly anxious.

Mal, Zoe, Wash and Jayne make their way to the docking bay. It's frought with danger; bodies, mini explosions, general panic and crumbling fuselage do their best to halt the gangs progress but they manage to make it to Serenity. She seems in tact. Wash engages the necessaries and they blast away from the carnage of the crumbling vessel. Once free from the space debris - Book's assuring vocal tones come through the radio. Relief!

Back on Serenity the crew greet one another. There is an uncharacteristic show of affection from Inara who unashamedly grabs Mals arm and let's it linger just long enough to make it mean much more. He obliges by giving her a silent prolonged look into her eyes. Kaylee asks what next which prompts Mal straight back into Captain mode and he tells them - they're going to have to find out just who did this. When Kaylee asks why? Zoe informs her of the family's onboard who most likely all but perished on that cruiser. Plus Mal adds - someone is going to be looking to point the blame, and right now Serenity and her crew are the most likely candidates - meaning they have to clear thier name. Best way to do that (as alliance won't listen to him) is to catch the people responsible.....

and Mal asks Kaylee to scan Serenity for homing beacons. If Alliance follow protocol - they've tagged Serenity and right now they're setting off all kinds of Alliance bells and whistles. That'll only slow them down in their quest to find the real culprits!

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An alliance HQ. A Firefly isometirc diagram surrounds the control room. Several officers observe the display. One gestures to a minion who immediately engages the radio... A 'Wave' is sent: To find and destroy Firefly class ship "SERENITY"!.....

End of Part II

TO BE CONTINUED.....

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Friday, January 23, 2009 8:12 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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Ooh, curious! But wouldn't Inara or Kaylee also be concerned about the people on the Cruiser?? Also, wow! Now that's a big-sized plot idea!

Well quite possibly - but I think the uncertian nature of the signal leaves them rather more pragmatic, and they maybe look to maintain keeping River away from Alliance interaction. Add to that the fact that Kaylee and Simon are now more of an item and Kaylees motives become more intent on what Simon would want...

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And they are! Crap! (I'm loving this, it would make an excellent episode!)

aww shucks

thanks

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Aaaah! I love this...! Next episode! I need to know what happens next!!

He, he. That's nice to read. Actually sorry for not writing sooner. Work has been particualrly demanding this week and I've just not had the right frame of mind. Apologies.

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*popcorn*

Yes please. Sweet one for me.

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Friday, January 30, 2009 10:39 PM

AGENTROUKA

A new one!! How did I miss this?? :D

And an exciting one, at that! I like a plotty arc - that sets off even bigger plotty arcs, hehe!

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Originally posted by TheSomnambulist:
Meantime segments of the cruiser continue to explode sending splinters of ship hurtling through space. One such huge piece flies furiously close and just past the shuttle of Inara!

Cool, I like the visual transition! I can imagine how great it would look on screen..

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Mal, Zoe, Wash and Jayne make their way to the docking bay. It's frought with danger; bodies, mini explosions, general panic and crumbling fuselage do their best to halt the gangs progress but they manage to make it to Serenity. She seems in tact. Wash engages the necessaries and they blast away from the carnage of the crumbling vessel.

Ooh, they just take off without trying to save any of the panicking people?? Nice touch of darkness there! Mal is pretty ruthless when it comes to his crew. Of course, this won't help him with the Alliance, who might see it as a sign of his culpability..

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- they're going to have to find out just who did this. When Kaylee asks why? Zoe informs her of the family's onboard who most likely all but perished on that cruiser.

Gaah. Terrorism in space. Certainly a good angle to explore.

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Plus Mal adds - someone is going to be looking to point the blame, and right now Serenity and her crew are the most likely candidates - meaning they have to clear thier name. Best way to do that (as alliance won't listen to him) is to catch the people responsible.....

But how are they going to do that? I'm very intrigued!

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A 'Wave' is sent: To find and destroy Firefly class ship "SERENITY"!.....

End of Part II

TO BE CONTINUED.....

So, with Serenity tagged and the Alliance not looking to take prisoners.. are they going to stow her somewhere?? Separate? Somehow find all the beacons and pray no one recognizes Serenity??

MORE! :D

It's really a great transitional episode. It would need a wee bit of plot enhancement to work on its own, but it sets up some great things with very intense implications - plus, nice moments between the crew. :)

But as I said, MORE! Please.

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Tuesday, February 10, 2009 11:27 AM

THESOMNAMBULIST

Originally posted by AgentRouka:

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A new one!! How did I miss this?? :D

And an exciting one, at that! I like a plotty arc - that sets off even bigger plotty arcs, hehe!

Why thank you again. AgentRouka. :D Sorry to have neglected this -- I'll explain below.

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Cool, I like the visual transition! I can imagine how great it would look on screen..

Be nice wouldn't it. I tend to think visually first with this stuff. So glad that worked.

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Ooh, they just take off without trying to save any of the panicking people?? Nice touch of darkness there! Mal is pretty ruthless when it comes to his crew. Of course, this won't help him with the Alliance, who might see it as a sign of his culpability..

Ahh well, with a bit more time and the ability to flesh this out, this scene would actually be very confrontational. A mix of:

"We must help!"
and:
"We help we die..." type attitude. There be a lot of conflict in here.

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Gaah. Terrorism in space. Certainly a good angle to explore.

He,he.. I think I may as well tell you... Oh no I'll try and develop a later episode.

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But how are they going to do that? I'm very intrigued!

Um... With a bit of techno babble I'm afraid. Something about finding the source of the signal etc, etc. then refining the search to those they know who may have the means to do such a thing. Would of course involve much investigation.

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So, with Serenity tagged and the Alliance not looking to take prisoners.. are they going to stow her somewhere?? Separate? Somehow find all the beacons and pray no one recognizes Serenity??

Nope! Fly right into danger! Alliance hot on their heals. Nothing I like more than a chase through space that seems impossible to escape from. Sorry but my swashbuckling dreams simply get the better of me sometimes. :D

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MORE! :D
It's really a great transitional episode. It would need a wee bit of plot enhancement to work on its own, but it sets up some great things with very intense implications - plus, nice moments between the crew. :)

But as I said, MORE! Please.

Oh definitely. I'm trying to write small paragraphs that explain as much as possible. Thing is there's tons to say - only wish I had more time to do this. I'm a bit swamped with work so my heads not in it. Sorry. Also in a couple of days I'll be on a short break in the Ardennes with some friends for a week so not sure when I'll post next. But I will.

It's interesting there are 723 views of this post, yet you and I appear to be the only ones writing? Bluesuncompanyman has left us?

Hope people don't think this an exclusive thing. Everyone is welcome to write...

Anyone?...

*static*

Hellooo?

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