Hey there!
First of all, the piece has a good tone and conveys Mal's feelings about Serenity, good job.

There are a few things that could be fixed about it though, so I'm gonna give you a quick and dirty mini-beta here since you asked for feedback. :)

Your use of the "She's tore up plenty, but she'll fly true" quote doesn't really work for me as the first thing he ever though of Serenity, as this is Zoe's metaphor to Mal about how she's doing at the end of the movie - she's not just talking about the ship there, she's talking about herself - so taking it and putting it as the first thought Mal's ever had about Serenity doesn't really fit.

"It was love, true love, when he saw her for the first time." ~ Perfect. :)

"She was the only place after the war, he could ever feel was his home. The only place he could ever find his true serenity." ~ if you're going to use the comma in the first sentence, you should use one to separate the whole 'after the war' phrase. Also, this really could be one sentence with a semi-colon, i.e. "She was the only place, after the war, he could ever feel was his home; the only place he could ever find his true serenity."

"Get a crew, people who care bout' each other." ~ you switch tense here, and go from talking about Mal seeing Serenity in the past, to getting a crew now, in the present. It would work if it was a flashback of Mal's thoughts, in which case use of italics or some other differentiating style would let the reader know that. I would definitely move it from the end of this paragraph to the start of the next one. And bout' should be 'bout, the apostrophe is representing the letter you are dropping, in this case the 'a'

"Find that gohram soldier Zoe." 'gohram' is spelled 'gorram'. I'm not sure why Mal would refer to Zoe as 'that gorram soldier' as 'gorram' generally means 'god damned' and doesn't work for me in how Mal thinks of Zoe.

"Find a piolet, needs to be faster'n hell." Piolet is spelled Pilot.

"Maybe a cook damn good one too." This needs at least a comma after 'cook' if not a semi-colon.

"Mehanic to get her going again." Mehanic should be Mechanic.

"Live like real people, just us and the black!" That sums it up :)

So, there's a few things for you to think about. A spell check before you post is a must to catch those little errors.

Keep at it! You're doing good, and you'll only get better the more you write!

I love it.

thank for the criticizem and my microsoft words otto spell check decided to have a tude so sorry 'bout that :)

No worries, just something to keep in mind :) And I hope it's constructive criticism for you! Definitely keep writing!

it is thx :)

Glad to see you're keeping at it, Iwtmw, and writing more Firefly. I second 2x2's points. Constructive feedback is really helpful. :-) Keep writing and keep flying!

:)I will :)