BLUE SUN ROOM FAN FICTION - HORROR

SEAL892

desent into hell
Wednesday, October 4, 2006

I was reading some Poe and this idea came into my head so I wrote it down. It be great to get some feedback if possible.


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Decent into Hell I do not know who long I have been hear, the days go on stretching into moths and years for all i know I could have been here for a week or my how life. What I do know is that I am in pain and Dieing. They lower my cage, not big enough to sit up in, to the floor so that they can start on me again. They lower it slowly so slowly so that I may think about what they'll do to me, I can hear the pain around me and the death, the screams of the tortured soles around me echo for ever more though the air sending shirkers up my spine, always more pain and more noise until all you can hear is the suffering around you. They were once men, the torturers, but they were driven insane and are know only the crazed ravings of the people who they once were, I pity them, they new what it was the feel the suffering but were unable to control their emotions. I think that what they want, more then anything in the pain they cause, is to show the world what its like to be driven so totally mad. They want to know why they feel why they feel what they feel, to understand through the suffering of others. They cut , they burn they peel and yet they don't understand. I'm close to them know and I can see their faces, sad faces, cold faces, angry and bold faces but all insane. Every face ravaged by suffering and time, the wounds which they inflict unto themselves is unbearable. Still it isn't the sites or the sounds that make bile rise to my throat its the smell, the smell of gore, of death so violent, the blood that spill over all the floor, the vomit and guts that linger after the body's are disposed of. My blood is their. A eye for a eye , a pound of flesh. I have lost all and know I find myself longing for death. They are on my cage. OH GODS I'M IN HELL!

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Wednesday, October 4, 2006 10:14 AM

SECOND


Your “AutoSpellChecker” picked wrong. Your first sentence from Decent [Descent] into Hell: I do not know who [how] long I have been hear [here], the days go on stretching into moths [months] and years for all i know I could have been here for a week or my how [whole] life. It does sound like Poe, though. For a story this short, if you're going for maximum emotional impact, you need to put a Firefly character's name on who is in the cage. Gives it some zing! Or leave some clues about who it is.

Wednesday, October 4, 2006 10:41 AM

SEAL892


Its not a charracter from the show or movie its just a tortured soul. I thought peeps might have trouble understanding some of the spelling since Im not a 5 star speller.

Monday, July 16, 2007 7:06 PM

SPARDA


my god FANO1 go out side for the love of god

not bad not my fav by you but not bad

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